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zen

I'm no longer afraid to die
I'm surely not afraid to kill
I walk with purpose in my eye
and nothing written in my will
among the mortals I am fierce
without a blink I can kill ten
I wear the armor no blades pierce
and all along my mind is zen
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:iconexistence-is-futile:
otta love the samurai mindset ^^
I love this - what do the sybols mean??
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:iconnegativefeedback:
the symbols are also the ones on my home page [link] and they mean Negative Feedback

it's kinda hard to find the symbols for what you want to write
but I think I got this right because the first two mean "negative" (from math) and the last two "feedback" (physics) and that is exactly what I wanted
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:iconexistence-is-futile:
I should know that..:P
I trus you'll have got it right - you're pedantic like that ;)
xD
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:iconensinodanna:
cool..thanks >D
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:iconasura-valkyrie:
I love it.

With slight suggestion for an alteration. It seems to hiccup in sixth line, altering the flow.

Instead of "without a blink I can kill ten" what about "without a blink I've killed ten"?
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:iconnegativefeedback:
the number of syllables by line are (if I counted correctly :D)
8, 8, 8, 8
9, 8, 9, 8 and I don't really feel there is a need for a change
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:iconariesnamarie:
AriesNamarie Jun 5, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love this
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:iconboxofslavery:
Very interesting...
Very Zen...
Very Samurai...
I am Zen and I liked it.
My husband was Samurai and so does he.
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